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分析：
字數(shù)：651
語言：平實的語句完全沒有網(wǎng)絡(luò)流行模板的痕跡，也是許多過了6級的考生通過練習(xí)可以達到的水平。
I must say that I reject this statement.
Does that mean that we should simply accept the status quo and make do? No, I don’t think so.
Technology has helped, and it has hurt.
Technology is indeed a double-edged sword. And yet, I still have to argue in its favor, because without it, we have no hope.
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當然，這并不意味，在GRE作文考試中，平實的語言比潤色后的語言有更多的優(yōu)勢。從這篇作文中，我們可以得到以下兩條重要信息：
1、 通過記憶大量模板使語言“全副武裝”、“氣勢洶洶”并非高分作文的必要條件。
2、 在陳述idea的過程中，體現(xiàn)出critical thinking才是成功的關(guān)鍵。現(xiàn)在請大家一起來體會這一概念在文中的運用。
第一段：
（表明立場）I must say that I reject this statement. （讓步）While it is true that we need to support society as much as possible with current technology, （折回自己立場）that does not in any way mean that we should stop progressing simply because our current technology cannot handle all the problems we have brought to it.
第二段：
（概述科技的兩面性）Technology has helped, and it has hurt. （具體討論科技的貢獻）Without it, we would never have our standard of living, nor quality of nutrition, expectation of a long and productive life span, and the unshakable belief that our lives can be made even better. （具體討論科技的危害）But it has also brought us universal pollution, weapons so powerful as to be capable of rendering us extinct, and the consequent fear for our survival as species and as a planet. Technology is indeed a double-edged sword. （表明已考慮到科技的危害，但是依然堅持自己立場）And yet, I still have to argue in its favor, because without it, we have no hope.
第三段：
（提出反方的立場）Some might argue that we would be better off without technology. They might say that a return to a less technologically driven approach to life would have the benefits of reducing stress and allowing us to live simpler, happier lives, like those of our forebears. Such an idea is seductive, so much so that much of art and all of nostalgia are devoted to it. （通過具體論據(jù)反駁反方的觀點）But upon closer inspection, one realizes that such a move would only return us to a life of different kinds of stress, one of false simplicity, one fraught with danger. It would be a life without antibiotics where a minor cut could prove deadly. It would be a life where childbirth is the main killer of women, and where an emergency is dealt with in terms of hours and days instead of minutes and hours; a life where there are no phones or cars or planes or central heating, no proven drug therapies to treat mental illness, no computers. Would this world really make people happy?
第四段：
（在第三段駁論的基礎(chǔ)上進一步立論）What we already have, we have. And since the only way to move is forward, instead of allowing ourselves to be paralyzed by fear and worry, we need to learn how to clean up the pollution we have caused, and how to deal with a world that feeds on weapons and mass destruction. Doing these things means having to move away from technology into a more difficult realm, that of diplomacy and compromise: to move from the bully stance of “I am bigger and better and I have more toys and so I win” to a place where everyone wins.
第五段：
Technology is the thing that will allow people to do that. （指出支持觀點存在的一點不足）But, advanced as it is, it is still in its infancy. （解決方案）We have to allow it to grow up and mature in order to reap the real rewards that it can bring. And there are even greater rewards ahead of us than what the world has already experienced. When technology is pushed to the outer edge, that is where serendipitous discoveries can occur. This has been seen throughout technological advancement, but the easiest example is probably the space program which made us think, really hard, about how to do things in a different environment. It gave us telecommunications, new fabrics and international cooperation. Paramedical devices, so that people can be treated even as they are being transported to the hospital, are a direct development of that technology. None of this would have happened in the time frame that it did if we had not pushed for technological advancement. If we had decided to “focus on maximizing the use of existing technology” instead of foolishly reaching for the stars, we would not have made those discoveries which now are the bedrock of the 21st century.
（來源：網(wǎng)絡(luò) 新東方 王丹丹）
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