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另外，大家都喜歡介紹自己的學(xué)校，但是你的介紹要具體生動(dòng)，不要總喜歡用什么prestigious和famous之類(lèi)的話(huà)。有的同學(xué)這樣寫(xiě)道：I went into a Univ. which won great reputation in telecommunication and IT field in China. 什么叫great reputation，有什么具體概念嗎？大家不用停留在介紹學(xué)校方面，應(yīng)該通過(guò)這種介紹迅速轉(zhuǎn)入一點(diǎn)：你受到了high qualified的教育。
最大的問(wèn)題，PS不要寫(xiě)成流水帳，每個(gè)段落要有核心句子。比如有的同學(xué)這樣寫(xiě)道：In the first year, I was just a discreet learner, following the teacher’s step steadily. The second year, leader’s work in student government cost most of my time, so I tried to be more efficient. 這根本就不是PS，只能算回憶錄。請(qǐng)注意：你要把最重要的信息放在段落的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾（Put the most important sentences at the beginning and end of the paragraph. When people skim passages, they look at the first and then the last sentence. Make a good first and last impression with substantive statements. Don't begin or end on fluff.）。
第四，除非特別要求，不要寫(xiě)成問(wèn)答式的。有很多同學(xué)這樣寫(xiě)：First, My old dream played a key role in my decision-making. 然后一大段介紹：Second, My solid academic background，然后下面再一大段，一直到第六個(gè)My Family background。還有的同學(xué)這樣寫(xiě)：WHY IS MATHEMATICS? WHY ME？這絕對(duì)不是PS，千千萬(wàn)萬(wàn)要避免這種回答。如同華盛頓大學(xué)PS寫(xiě)作要求中提到的（http://www.flytowest.com/ps/usps/wash.htm）Avoid overly common phrases and nonspecific information.（避免用那些太平常的詞組或者不具體的信息）。
第五，不要寫(xiě)為國(guó)家和社會(huì)主義做貢獻(xiàn)之內(nèi)的比較空泛的話(huà)。Besides traveling to Taiwan, realizing the importance of experiencing the real world, in the past three years, I have grasped every opportunity to travel far and observe the dynamic society and economy of China. 不要用同樣的句式，比如有的同學(xué)總是喜歡用impress deeply這樣的話(huà)，甚至一個(gè)段落中反復(fù)使用，要么就是不停地說(shuō)intelligent。還有的就是句式雷同，Computer animation is my favorite and first choice，然后隔兩句就寫(xiě)my primary and foremost interest lies in graphics and design。語(yǔ)言問(wèn)題還有頭重腳輕，比如Most computer majors look over this task because they consider it too easy; nonetheless, I do not agree. 實(shí)際上，語(yǔ)言問(wèn)題還是小問(wèn)題。你可以花100元錢(qián)請(qǐng)個(gè)認(rèn)真負(fù)責(zé)的老外，找個(gè)學(xué)校的角落修改一下，一邊communicate what you wish to say。實(shí)際上，關(guān)鍵的問(wèn)題就是內(nèi)容設(shè)置和結(jié)構(gòu)布局。
（來(lái)源：網(wǎng)絡(luò)）
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